Excellent piece, I haven't seen the concept before and I absolutely love the title you picked out for it. The pace of the poem is so fast, it really gets you in the story and doesn't let go. The vocabulary was excellent, you found a great balance between complex and basic. I absolutely love the twist in the ending as well, you managed to keep your readers focussed throughout the whole piece due to your wonderful imagery and pure emotion.

Very nice piece, keep it up!

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