Calim:

Ok Man..I See The Format You Used In This Poetry Battle. I Feel This Is A Very Lazy Structure For A Writer and It Takes Away From The Story and Emotion...You Had Some Nice Vocab Here and There, but Your Emotion Was Forced. If Your Gonna Use That Structure Master It First. I Really Think Your Drop Was Basic...If That. No Hate but Honestly.

Best Line:

"No room for error, mimic my father but make things right is my one plan
Funny how my sons birth into childhood catalyzed my birth as a man"

Acuity:

This Had A Topical Format/Structure To It...Which Isn't Always A Bad Thing, It Just Shows That From Your Topical To Poetry..You Can't Switch Styles. Your Emotion and Vocabulary Was Decent and The Imagery Was Nice. I Enjoyed This Piece.

Best Line:

"So I vow, never to allow myself to father this seed wid neglect and scorn
Because, the lord, has givin me infinite joy in the conception of this angelic boy"

Vote: Acuity

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Good Battle You Two!

~R~