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Old 05-15-05, 11:21 AM   #11
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it was ok, could have been a lil more thorough tho. coulda used some more metaphors in there. ya had some good flow and structure. maybe add a multie or two to make things more complex, ya feel me? but other than that a pretty solid drop
7/10
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