View Single Post
Old 05-16-05, 07:28 PM   #10
Paranoid
The Paragraph President
 
Paranoid's Avatar
 
Posts: 3,248
From: Sask, Canada
This was feedback posted for Sakim Aerias

IP:

Sakim
not bad decent piece good stucture for most and ya flow was decent but ya lines are a lil long. vocabulary coulda been a bit upped. rhyme scheme wasn't bad the 1st verse it was decent the 2nd verse it stood out more. but overall not bad piece. B-
__________________
I don't jack beats; I borrow them.



My Myspace
My Soundclick
Send a message via AIM to Paranoid Send a message via MSN to Paranoid