This was good, i was feelin the vocabulary and emotions and such,but i feel that it was missing something, maybe it was a certain rhyme element or maybe a word that touches the soul,like the oomph was missing,but you wee so close though...i think you have talent in this subject and please dont quit,but it wasn't bad,it just needed more..1

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