hmmmm this was decent

you feel off towards the middle,the vocab was okay,i think you could of did more with this....the piece just seemed a little basic,the imagery wasnt bad though you expressed your views nicely,the only thing i feel you really need to work on is staying on subject and fixing your speeling errors make sure before you drop every piece you use spell check so you well not have this problem next time,anyways keep dropping man peace

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