Voted For: CA$per


CA$per

How r u gonna battle me,with that verse bein so obserd……
Cause hows he gonna punch me, when,hesa star warz nerd…..
^coo punch as opener

Dogg u make or break no one-unlike your user title claimz……
Dogg if your rapz were hair,u couldn’t be saved by rogain……
^good bar

Your shits so plain I mean,look at your battle with ax youll see……
Tha only way u could even get one vote,is by mentionin me…….
^bit self-glorification tho, no real punch

talk about sumone get burned like matches,well than u flared……
its cause adrenilen STINKZ like sulfur,hes highly compared……
^coo playing off his name

u even rymed dogg with dawg,sorry that’s not really a ryme….
but that would explain thou,why your record is six and nine…..
^whooooo, getting personal right here hehe

how tha fukk u a legend in tha makin,u still aint any better…..
only way u elevate is in a hot air balloon in windy weather…..
^elevating lines are bit played but it's still hard punch though

if your so pumped with adrenilin,im like ritalin makin u mellow…
u couldn’t be KODAC matrial,if ya had tha spokesman for jello.
^tight wordplay in first line ended off with punch in second one

Nice verse here, was quite consistent with hard punches and got some personal stuff going on in there. Found nice balance in your vocab, had flow on lock, structure was cool. Only think to work on is keeping up the pace, like hitting hard in every bar, trying to avoid fillers but you're getting better every time i read battle of you! Keep it up!


Adrenaline

Im a "livin legend" so this kid should "replace my sig wit his"
u a "friendly ghost",damn just disappear from da rap business
^coo opener, could've been worded differently to hit harder though

"somebody stop me" cuz im leave dis kid's whole face "masked"
ya im "glowin in the dark" n' my lightsaber will have u harrased
^self-glorification and no punch

leave you "clowned" so bow down b4 u get ya head "circused"
sever ya lungs n' ya "click" so even ya "phonelines" get nervous
^hehe, nice bar

ya im coppin da "sickest" flow that's why im "rushin" the system
I "make u or brake you" so stop "fallin off" b4 u lose ya "rhythm"
^only second half of second line is about your opponent, rest is about you

tried to battle me on "da 13th" so u can clear ur "suspicions"
but ur a "ghost" u fear me cuz my shots to emcees they rid em
^first line seemed like good set-up but you failed to finish it in second line

Coo verse you wrote here, had some nice creative punches, attempts to get personal but it didn't always work out that good in fact. What I noticed about your verse is that you use self-glorification a lot which can be good as one filler but not if you use it several times in a short verse, that's something you should try to avoid. Vocab is cool, was feeling ya flow and structure was cool.

Vote goes to CA$per because I feel he had harder punches and personals than Adrenaline, no hate though...y'all got potential for sure!

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