Flowed nicly. The imagination was good, needs to be more complex. The emtion was nice also. I suggest you use more & decent vocab. Meta'z are needed. Similies are needed also. But overall, nice piece.



I appreciate if you do the same for me (leaving a feedback) on my om


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=191237

^^ There's the link to my new OM please, leave feed.

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