Aight Check It...

Your Flow Through The Piece Is Off Due To Extensive Lines and Your Lack of Ability To Sumarize Your Thoughts. Your Emotion and Imagery Is There...They're Nice...but Without Good Vocabulary and Nice Sentence Structure..You'll Always Be An Average Topical Head.

I Did Enjoy Reading This, and The End Was Mos Def A Good Way To End This Piece of Literature. Good Creativity.

Keep It Up Man.

~R~