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IP:
This was a decent drop.. could have been alot better.. if
you would have used some creativity.. "Hard times"..
A very commen topic, but you didnt express in good wording ,
how hard those times were , and what happen to you in those times
You did say why it was hard times , but i just felt you could have elaborated more
Structure was off, it wasnt hepling the reader at all.. Vocab
and worplay usuage was decent, but could have been alot better. ..keep
it up
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