okay, this is how i saw it

both came with cool idea, different views of the topic....personally, i really liked the start of babylons, but didn't like the way you ended it...meh, first two verses were awesome, first one had sweet imagery, second had the emotion....third, didn't think you kept it consistent, not that it wasn't good....i thought you could have made it more effective........but still, you had a nice verse....i thought you would taken it

dq, i thought you were more consistent with your story, you had great emotion all the way through, flowed awesome, imagery (not as good as babylon's, but his was just fire)...i felt this was more of an emotional piece, and thats what made it so effective....it really set in and i was dripping off the edge of every line......good piece

good battle by both, def keep writing good verses

v/dq

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