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Old 05-23-05, 12:22 AM   #4
Paranoid
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lmfao. whoa stucture is weak vocabulary is decent. screw the // that makes you seem herbish emotion needs work imageyr is off a little flow is decent could be better but ya rhyme scheme is horrible but keep practing and elevating. 1

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