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hmmm, not that mizz fyre didn't have a bad verse, golden had such a good one!....such a cool story, really got involved, some lines were freakin awesome, lol......althought, i thought you could have worded the last paragraph a little better though, stil, you came nice with this topic, you tell such a vivid story, imagery is just in full bloom when you write man, lol.......could work a little more on emotion though......good verse

mizz fyre, emotion was awesome, i just thought you lacked depth, really..like storyline wise, it was kinda simple.......but still, pretty good verse, like i said, emotion was really good, and really stood out....keep writing

/rev, keep up to both

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