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Originally Posted by ~*Khatharsis*~
this piece is ok, not really good but its ok. not really feeling the structure, lost the flow in some places, needs work. but other then that, the topic was nice. not to obiest. i like the wordplay that was bieng formatted. but needs work..
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aiight, thanx for the honest feed - i was really tyna to convey emotion, not realy show off talent, but yes i need to work on those... thanx for thee feed
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Originally Posted by b-gurl
yeah i thot it was a real original piece i liked the concept n the meaning behind the words, structure was...meh...lol but its a poem so maybe u wanted it to be like that!  anyways keep comin up wit original shit like that i enjoyed readin it! |
yea like i said above, i wasnt working for structure more like emotion, but i will work on structure - thanx for the feed, glad you liked it