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Voted For: Tony Green

.:F.ate:. Verse

i’ll lay a trigga town nigga down like tha maggot he is
slap him wit verbage, such herbage shouldn’t have any kids
^ Meh opener...shoulda come harder not gangsta shit it's wack for battles

ha….this hoe ass nigga’d sell his soul for my lyrical content
tony have a conscience and realize that beatin me is nonsense
^ Self-Glory...blah...rhyming ok jus the SG messed it for me

ya punches couldn’t come close to hittin son, let alone hurt me
i could stop now and still end up 2-2 like a Tayshaun Prince jersey
^ No diss, more self-g it's basic at best you need to step it up

u forever d/r E.F. hoe get off crew hopper we focused
fuck structure, even if slip off i’m right....back…. on before u notice
^ 1st line i thought this was gonna be good...but then right back on the self-g

when i’m around u wont utter a peep if u feelin froggy then leap
matta fact fuck you send ya crew i’ll leave ya sheep dead in a heap
^ more self-g...

a little advice tone’ hang it up dawg quit rap ya effort is useless
meet up wit tha Q tha two of you can marry in Massachusetts
^ closer...meh...diss = not there u jus refering for him to marry a gay man...which is played

Overall
Horrible to read i don't mean to be harsh...you had punches but they weren't aimed at Tony at all...basically it's what you'd put out in a regular gangsta track...which is very newb...concentrate on ya opponent...not yourself...thats my lesson today

Tony Green verse

.:F.ate:. the pac wannaba always talkin bout what a gun will do.*
I took OneStep out of E.F. and went 10 feet beyond you.*
^ 1st line ok personal...2nd line self-g slightly...but a diss is there

But this beef is pointless lets not take it any farther.
So I'm just gone bomb one of Emerica's Finest like he was Pearl Harbor.
^ Self-G "i'm just gonna bomb" replace to "u'll get bombed" or sumthin like that it's so easy

If you look at his aviator it says ready for whatever.
Paw Paw hear them shots you wasn't ready for that bereatta.
^ punch wack...personal wrongly approached...

Nigga you's a Kid so stay playing with the Nets.**
Cause I'm gone sweep you 4-0 and move on to the next.**
^ self-g 2nd line

No disrespect you doing what you doing just to get by.
"I said you was hot" so people call Tony Green a lie.
^ Diss there punch is prolly the best so far...but it's average...but finally a proper diss

Livin' Legendz straight merk leave bitches in the dirt.
Your flowing is out of style like Fubu shirts.
^ lol liked this one...good diss

.:F.ate:. loves men yes I will clear up the rumor.
Hes on my dick so much hes more annoying than a brain tumor.
^ ok bar diss = good slightly played on the gay thing though

Him and OSB is in the backseat secret lovers.
The closet he got to pussy is Lil Kim's "La Bella Mafia" album cover.
^ lololol better than the previous 1 i said was best

My punches hit you so hard its knocking tattoo's off ya.***
Couldn't "Snuggle" with a bitch if your ass was fabric softner.***
^ good punch...nice flow

Post in your crew forum once and thats the most activity it ever gets.****
Blow your ass up in Dallas let you play with the Mavericks.****
^ Ok bar again nice rhyme punch good

This nigga bout to bite I know he pre-write.
Cause I'm posting before him and he accepted last night.
^ na it fell off here didn't feel this

*******Closer******
I walk with a fist a.k.a the tooth losener.*****
And I carry black but it aint a album and it will let you meet Lucifer.*****
^ Wack closer...self-g man it was going so good as well at one point

Overall
Started the same as fate but you picked up and done some good punches however you fell back into self-g in the last 2 bars...self-g really is only words like ima do and i will i can shit like that...jus a lil re-wording can eliminate self-g and make a verse more hard hitting...

V/Tony Green...purely because his verse was longer therefore opened up more actual punches than self-g ones it was again due to consistancy...both were pretty equal on structure and flow personals were meh coz of the SG but yea that's my look on it basically.

RTF in ma sig (vs E.C) within 3 days or vote = removed

Vote removed by Mad Dog's request