Acuity:
The Only Thing Wrong With Your Topical Verse Is That The Structure Is Off and Stretched but Besides That Your Good. The Verbal Imagery In This Peice Was Hot, Especially With The Multis Intwined With High Vocabulary. The Emotion Wasnt Too Strong, but This Peiece Really Wasn't For That..The Way I Took It.

One of The Best Lines:

"I wonder why, in my brain im insane asking how the bible can be a book of subliminal lies
Causing me to cry and look at disciple writings in contempt, conceit and despise"

Supervillain:
Alright, First Off I'ma Have To Say That Your Verse Was Too Simple To Beat Acuity. I Felt Your Story-Concept, but The Verbal Imagery and Intellect That Went Into Your Verse Just Wasn't Up To Par. I Can Tell That Your Not Too Comfortable With Topicals Yet, but Once You Get Used To Them The Vocabulary Enhancement Will Come and Then Once You Expand Your Language..Concepts and Greater Lines Will Come To You.

One of The Best Lines:

"Our Lord works in mysterious ways....Pat never got his burial rites
he survived the attempted suicide and gained a new outlook on life"

My Vote Goes To: Acuity

Good Battle You Two!

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