well what im going to say is, the LENGTH of this piece could have been better, in my eyes, you cut the story short, but i guess theres a PART 2 to this. your strongest part on this piece was.
Quote:
Can't escape this shadow its always around.
Gives off a fearful aura. scared to close my eyes
can't seem to find peace
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^^^these were the imagery lines, this is what took me to a higher tinking.
but otherwise, this was a mediocre piece.