now im going to have to say this battle goes to "WITS". He first of all had a better Structure, it looked tidy. He had nice flow, i can really think about what he is saying.

best lines used was.

Quote:

.:: My eyes are still closed, and I can feel the back of the searching hand, ::. .:: Never have I felt so exposed... seems life never goes exactly how you plan. ::. .:: I can remember the harsh lights, staring down at me like surrounding suns. ::. .:: Claustrophobia coming, the walls so tight...holding me, giving no room to run. ::.

very nice liness used here, so much imagery.