Whys That?
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not to bad bro..at first it didnt seem to rhymes and I saw it as a poem more than s ong..but as I slowly got thru it I began to catch your flow and see some a your rhymes.
emotion in this is good,structure could be a bit better. rhymes could be better and additional vocab wouldnt hurt either..try some solid metaphors and similies in it...
Overall it wasnt too bad, you got a good style.
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