this was decent i personally expected better here but overall good anyways fluid you lacked in emotion and imagery a lil which is weird cuz thats usually you strong points on poetry vocab also couldve been upped here.overall o.k but not for your standards 5/10
jimmy better good imagery emotion lacked a little though vocab your strong point still good here showed me a little you jump around too much which i noticed in alot of new poets overall 7/10

im disappointed i expect more from you 2

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