good structure..nice emotion bro...imagery is there...vocab could be alot better...and originality...you need to start finding diffrent topics bro!
your last 5 poems have been about love..
but seen as your rvs mr love..(lol) this is pretty good...just try some diffrent concepts to love..maybe add soem twists and shit thru out it....just so you end it with a woootwooot..ya feel?

anyway..another good love poem from you..