Liricle....your shit was pretty ok..... good imagery/ emotion but just a little too simplisical. I think that you coulda definatly anted up on this one forsure. I think that by starting out with "yo" kinda deflated some of the autheticity of your piece... your vocab could use a little uppin too> this is just my opinion

Pocketz > Good peice> your approach was more indepth/ thought higher... better vocab/ flow, immagery was pretty good. for this you steal my vote

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