Total Breakdown

LS

Aii Man I Like the way thought you come with your own original way of Doin your verse and even your lines came with much originality so that was one good thing BUT you didnt have that climax taht i was looking for that specaily hook that would make me go .....Oh ok !! ....get wat im sayin ?

So Basically You Left me hanging on a broken limb ( Your story line didnt supply what i was lookin for )

J. Pocketz

Aii Man You Came out and you did ya thing you shorten your piece Which is very unusual to see in a Poem LOL j.k but you was very original not much imigary but you did supply a good story line ( to me ) so If i had to give this battle to anybody itd be you

RTF in my Poetry / Topical Battle