mmm, lets see.

LS: i must say that your ryhme scheme is off, (no hate) but i think this is a shitty drop. you could have wrote a little bit of better verse for this. you stayed on point atleast, but the structure through me off most of the time.

JP: well, this is something im going to tell you but fo take it so offensive, dont ever use italics again, it throws the reader off, you dont write these things for looks. but i do like the structure bieng foreplayed. the story line was nicely put forth. stayed on point with the keys. very short verse in my point in view but. this verse gave you the winning cast.

VOTE: JP
REASON: his structure was nice, stayed on point with the verse, overall a very good concept.