word, uhh, artistic definately took this in all categories, imagery, vocab, creativity......both dropped good, but AM, just a little better...i think if mizz fyre woulda expanded a little more, woulda been better, cause that was a good idea, just needed more to work with i think.

AM, uhmm, one big suggestion, spell things correctly, lol....no offense, but it kinda takes away from the overall enjoyment when you rush things and dont look over, it might just be me, cause i dont like reading so many errors, sorry.....but just take a little more consideration.....other than that, good piece, nice approach, i thought some lines coulda been worded better, but i see that you key'd it, so its understandable.....you have talent, and it showed here, keep up to both

v/AM

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