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Old 05-30-05, 06:27 AM   #20
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Not a bad topical battle ok ima break this down

Ghost...nice 1st attempt the topic was there it just aimed direction in my opinion flow was good a lil stretched the wording and style was good but i think a stronger story was needed really you were jus sayin stuff that was on topic but there was hardly any imagery or depth into you topical also closer didn't rhyme which hindered the verse but all in all it was a good piece and you'll get better as you go on.

Mizz Fyre...your verse this time round i was feelin it had a story to it and kept a vivid imagery to it...a mothers story a very nice way to go off such an interesting topic the flow and structure was very easy to read and decently laid out this IMO was the winning verse i could picture a mother sitting on a bench talkin to her baby and i liked that.

v/Mizz Fyre...RTF on my battle (vs accomplish) within 3 days or vote removed
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