Ok 1st
Ur flow
Seemed extremely choppy
i do seem attempts at multi's to try and fix it but like in this line:

he chokes on the food he has been GIVEN, food from the garbage can this aint no LIViN

The words i capitled are the only ones that rhyme but the line is too long for that so either throw some more multi's in their ( 5 judgin the lengh) or shorten lines
However content wise it was a good read
Elevate my brother