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I'm just going to assume Bond isn't showing up...
vote/Khatharis
Stanza: Nice drop here, had some good emotion to it and a storyline that didn't sway, however its an overused concept. I did like how your last lines of where he is about to commit suicide were all written with the last word on the next line...it was cool. You got skills
Khatharis: Damn man, that was tight. Usually with pieces that long I lose focus in the middle, but this gripped me man. Emotion and imagery was great, could really feel this guy's pain for what the people did to him. Vocab was simple, but it didn't need to be any better. Just a dope piece man
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