legend - nice drop with good flow and structure. wasn't feeling the imagery though. emotion was pretty dece...overall a solid verse the ties in nicely with the rest. you had a sick use of vocab which would surprisingly sound good on an audio...
atticus- nothing bad to say. outstanding use of vocab, imagery and good emotion too.
some structure was off but the syllable count was all there which is what really matters. nice
revelation- your verse would sound dope on audio and it looked like that was what you were writing it for with the way you structured it and the "i want to change" before almost every line. Although it helped your flow, it kinda took away from the imagery because people get bored of reading that line over and over. other than that it was solid with good emotion.

nice drop from you all...i wanna hear this on audio tho......pz

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