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Ya mom massages my nuts
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IP:
This is a good piece here....I liked where you went with it....good emotion...some parts seemed somewhat forced emotionally....u overstated a few times....and ya flow was somewhat forced as well...it woulda been nice if u had more multies but thats jus knitpicking....structure was good....vocab was strong....for the most part this piece was solid...a lil touching up an it'd be that much better...but overall good shit, a nice read...keep it up.....1
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Haters spend all they time hating on another's life
Then wonder why when presenting there's to others...no one looks twice
Because at the end of the day, you get what you give
So, when you consumed with his...don't get mad when everyone else is
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