definately an original piece. well done to both.

i thought it lacked vocab a little, it seemed dry. nothing really that stood out too much, although overall, it was an enjoyable piece...but definately could have been alot more. it seemed as if, Rev, you wrote your piece too quickly; it did not seem like you writting. some sentances were worded funny, and just did not seem like this was the calibur of writing. no offense, the thought was there, but i feel if you took a little more time, with wording and such, this could have really stood out. none the less, it was very original and nice to read

christianitie: never read anything from you before, and i thought it was a little plain, but the message you were sending, was definate. same advice, if you took a little more time to edit wording, i think this could have been a really good piece, and one of the best lately. overall, it was a nice read, refreshing from all the morbid pieces floating around. keep up to both.

7/10

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