Macca- Alright man it wasnt the best. And it wasn't your best I've seen. The imaginary was there, just a lil, the emotion i just didnt feel it man upp on that. The rhyme scheme wasn't good either. You approach it different from the other's which this whole OM didnt go as smooth.

Atticus- I kinda like your's the best, good rhyme scheme. The imaginary was there, but the emotion yeah it lacked too. The vocba was good. The flow was nice. This was just overall the best one from the 2.

The r- Man, i didnt like your verse at all. The imaginary was there, but the emotion wasn't. You had a good balance on your vocab. Dont stretch your lines.


Overall=This callab wasn't i would expect it to be, cause everyone had different view's but everyone had the same problem, the emotion. The imaginary is the best aspect in this whole entire verse...

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