Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
first things 1st, young dollar:
I know on da real dis nigga wont come *guns sparkin*
So i'll bust a nut in dudes mouths, so nigga can *cum talkin*
//gun flow, a no-no on this site generally, and then, hmm.. its not a rhyme i would drop but its original, 3/10
Where did u get ya *game from*...........
yo skillz is like Whitney Houston's weight,you need ta *gain some*
//original, personal, clickin the right boxes 8.5/10
So dont fuck wit me,Ill *dish chrome*dat'll leave ya *shit blown*
cause dis dudes got 'less hooks' than a no *fish zone*/
//nice bars here im backin this part, original again, with nice wordplay 8/10
Ya verses u do should be called *drastic flops*
and if you so sick,why u still on da street like *traffic cops*
//a bit basic, but a punch, nontheless 4/10
U will never be a Boy in Da Hood,ridin in a *wax layer body Jag*
Unless u just in da hood white chalk,in a *tax payer body bag*
//hmm OK, but it doesnt hit hard enough 3/10
N I checked ya old post,i got rhymes to make ya brain *rupture*
Da only thing dat was khaoctic about dude,was just his *structure*
//like that one, personal
8/10
Homies rap cuz His John told em, He cant *See this*
Cuz shawty just a fat white boy who cant see his *penis*
// again very average, but not bad so 5/10
Merk niggas wit guns N *Rhymes*,
to merk ya body N lyrical *Mind*
//
2/10
To Me Your just another sorry *Heaven Filler*
Cuz If your a Livin Legend Then Im a *Legend Killer*
//ambitious, 8/10
True story...You dont know wat *thug bout*, niggas ~act~, *guns out*, blow his ~back~ to his *buns out*,squeese da ~mac~,till it *runs out*,
//gun-flow again and not a great one 2/10
Put a crome glock to ya *brain N Temple*, *Plain N simple*,
Guns start singin as if it was Shirly *Temple*
not even a shirley temple mention is gonna save that one 1/10
N ya fam knows da scenario of you bein *lost...scary*
Now thats wat da fuck u call a *Khaos Theory*
//weak end
try something either more personal, or just plain offensive! 3/10
overall you need to put in a bit more work, not a lot your not bad dollar but its a no vote from me, and by the way i dont think kaos is a livin legend anymore, but this is NOT a crew vote. i just feel his verse is better and heres why:
kaos:
U Gonna Stay A Free Agent, I Advize DonT Get Ya Hopez Up
''Hot Bills''? Only Tyme U Been ''On Ice'' Is Playin Witta ''Hockey Puck''
//nice opener, not as harsh as i heard from u b4 tho still 6/10
PM'd Me, Sayin ''Dont Duck?'' But Why The Fuck Wuld I?
U Aint ''Alignin'' Yo Texts Rite, Lyke U Only Got 1 ''Good Eye''
//harder, nice personal,
8/10
I Wuld Cry, Not Frum Da Challenge, But Frum Da Laughz
U Culd Get On My Front Lawn, An U Still Unsure Bout ''Crossin My Path''
ok, but maybe a lil lesss boosting a lil more roasting 6/10
''Vote Or Die Niggaz''? Datz A Thin Line, But I Think They Choose Da Latter
U'd Think My Rhymez Wuzza ''Nine'' Cuz Diz Kid ''Runs & Scatters''
//a breif gat mention, but i like the intro 6/10
Yo Verses Are Juz Fillers, Dat Makez Ya' Beef Authentic Az ''I-Hop''
Dick Play? U Aint Been ''Touched'' Lyke A Jewish Kid Scared Ov Da Chop
//personal and original but not as good as other shit you've sed so, 6/10
Ur ''Gased Up'' On ''Root BEER''...So Now U CanT Think Straight!?
Ask Pac ''If Heaven Got A Ghetto''
U AINT NICE! Tho, I Got A Mil Dat God Wuldnt Even Let U Past Da Front GATE
//structure probs... but OK 5/10
GangstATLANTA? I'll ''Bang-Head-Bounce-ya'' An Do Dat A-Town Stomp
Lyke Yo Cyphers, U Aint ''Servin'' No Punz 4 Uz Niggaz 2 CHOMP
//nicer punch im backin it 8/10
Enter A Special ED Comp. An Even Da Dyslexics ''Get U Right''
Dey Said....''Wear Gary Colemanz Attire, Then U'll Be TIGHT!''
//a better finish, not the best, but better than your opponents
kaos you could do with lookin @ the thread about structure in help, or suttin but you got talent, and i like your flow.
dolar, prolly best havin a peak @ the punches thread to be real wit u i had the same probs when iii was new to rV, so its not the end of the world, you gots talent, just need to focus it.
thats my honest opinion, RTF, when im next in a battle both of y'all motherfuckers!
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