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IP:
Eh, I Wasnt Really Feeling It...
Some Aiight Wordplay And Such...
The Ending Rhymes Pretty Much Sucked Though...
The Way You Would Break The Flow To End With "Yo"...
That Doesnt Really Do It For Me...
People Will See That And Think You Lack Creativity...
Overall The Piece Wasnt That Bad...
But I Just Hated The Way You Rhymed At Points...
Just Work On Being More Creative...
And Its Ok To Rhyme The Same Word Twice...
But It Sounds Bad Unless Its The Same Word Used Differently...
Stay Up And Keep Writing Kid...
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