Stanza- Your choice of vocabulary was good, a bit basic in parts but fit into place well. It was too small to really get me into the story, which would've been a changing factor if you made it longer. A lot of loose ends in the story which can be good sometimes, but in other times it can decrease the greatness of the story. Very good piece, though.

Acuity- As usual, you kept up a pretty good level of vocabulary that added to the story. Showed some emotion, less then Stanza. Your vocabulary allows detail, and the length allowed you to get your point across. Good drop but far from your best...

I have to give it to Acuity because:

1. It was less vague
2. More of the story for me to get into

Didn't really like this topic a whole lot, though... both were decent.


v/ Acuity