Voted For: Stanza

Aight Its Like This..

Stanza:

Simlpe Vocabulary Here, and When I First Started Reading Mr. Hahns I Was Like DamN His Vocab Sick, but Then I Looked Deeply and His Shit Was Overworded and Didn't Make Sense. Your Piece Had A Sort-of Poetic Justice Feel To It Which I Like. Not My Topic of Choice LoL, but Ya'll Did Ya Thing.

Mr. Hahn:
Man, You Tried To Put All That Vocab In, but When You Do That You Have To Make Sure Its Not Overclouding and That It Makes Sense. With Sucha Simple Topic As This, You Went Way Beyond What You Should've. This Took Away From The Read and Feel of Your Topic.

Vote - Stanza For Better Overall Topical Verse.

~R~