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Aight Check It..

Daz:

Your Rhyme Scheme In This Seemed A Little Overpowering Which Made The Read Not As Smooth...but Your Vocabulary Was Decent. With Ten Lines You Did Pretty Decent To Get Your Point Across and Put In Some Nice Lines. I Like The Line About Jesus...That Was Nicely Set Up.

Nostradamus:

I Felt Your Piece Fasho, but Your Piece Was More of A Poetical Drop and I Feel That Your Style and Direction With Your Piece Didn't Really Get To Me As A Topical Set Up Like Daz's Did. Your Emotion Through Verbals Was Hot, but Your Imagery and Direction Wasn't There. Just Seemed Like A Person Who Was Confused With His Civialization....If This Was Poetry You Definitly Woulda Won.

Vote = Daz For Better Topical Written Drop.

~R~

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