Voted For: iLL as a killers grill®
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In The Beginning
In the beginning there were 9 wonders like an inning…smirking and grinning,
Thou the earth wasn’t winning… man would cause symmetry with its sinning,
^ To be honest...you tried too hard to rhyme...the symmetry thing i can't see the relevance to
Biased upon ways, we were only singular in decay…. Till religion was made,
The decision was laid, the last man standing a-cross, was to pay for our trade,
^ Better a lot of rhymes...but in this instance it was good...but topic is effected by the directness in rhymes
Now if we stand with science, its facts and belief now traveling in an alliance,
Try to compromise both like mien’s …, but mines(minds)are still in defiance,
^ miens?...either a typo but is that a word?....prolly sposed to be means...a topic for now...yes but a topic for the beginning...not really...
Ive tried to walk the line of a purest, but it sure is, tough to see where the turn is,
So I list n listen to where the cure is, but the truth seems to be the furthest …
^ rhyme rhyme rhyme...but it's off point...they are good bars but i can't see the connection with the topic itself
Thoughts are left doubting… while rights; are at best now joisting for sinning…
Decades of thinking. ”the end”, now move on n make this your new beginning..
^ i'm gonna say good bar...but the only one that was on topic
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Nostradamus Verse
In the beginning.
The aftermath slowly smokes my focus..
Who am I?, whered I come from?
& Did humans transform like hokus pokus?
^ Good opener layout a bit mmm...but the opener is on topic
Cause this worlds a circus's packed of un-perfect persons..
You sayin adam and eve? I'm defining our worthless purpose..
^ Adam & Eve = relevant and the connection is ok good bar
See being humans a transition stage, to be on the right page..
From flesh and bones, to being set free from a time cage..
^ good bar i liked the whole transition thing
I believe that the light rays, help us understand the immortal..
The next level, we might stay, or only dip our hands in this portal..
^ the next level...resembles a new beginning ok bar liking
Wake up, you been sleeping meat head..
See we aint knee deep in the dead, our real forms aint born yet..
^ best bit of the verse
So would it surprise you,
To hear a humans beginning was on their death bed..
Ask yourself..
^ Nicely finished...*thinking lol*
Overall
Interesting battle...topically...and this is my view point...Nos was more on point from start to finish...Daz no hate man but honestly there was only 1 bar on point of this whole topic...the rest to me made me think you were speaking about NOW and not the beginning...your styles weakness is that you will go off topic if you're not careful...if anything i advise for topicals you dumb down the multies coz IMO it didn't help...
Nos not the best i seen but definitely more on point...the topic was well handled slipped on 1 bar IMO but overall handled it better...
V/Nos...RTF within 4 days (as Prem ain't dropped & due tomorrow) or vote removed
