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Old 06-11-05, 11:47 AM   #10
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Voted For: .Barz Of Steel.

Have Ya "down-n-Quick", not up n Runnin like Ya Internet connection
Watch Me KO you With "Votes",But Best Believe Im not Runnin For Election
6/10...Nice 2nd Line
Im Steady "Weldin" Rhymez Apart Quick,Cuz Supposely Ya Barz-of-Steel
i Advice You To bring paramedics,Cuz therez Gon Be Dozenz Of -Scarz-to-heal-
6.5/10...Good Shit Both Lines Were Straight
Complicationz Of Spitting,Like A Dry MOuth Of a Hard Workin Athletic
You should Retire BEING A ROOKIE,Cuz Ya Lyriks Are Just Plain Basic N Pathetic!
5.5/10...Nothin 2 Serious Rite Here
Use Ya Verse For Basic Teachin,But Use Ya Mettalic Remainz For CONFETTI
Like Jason,But Its a Mic Im Holdin To KILL You Niggaz, Not An Oversized Machetti
5/10...You Not Really Dissin Him Here Fam
Have Ya Tongue-Kissin My "Nine",But Im Not Talkin About My "Erection"
Have Ya Cross-sided After This Battle,Cuz ima Have Ya "lookin" In 2 Different Directionz
7/10...Nice Close But Da 2nd Line Was Strected

Good Verse...At Some Parts You Wasnt Dissin Dude Tho, Dats Da Only Bad Thing About This


I done tore this kid, lyrics swarmed this bitch
And please, you about as street, as a forest is
7/10...Nice Opener Good Meta
So dawg, don't be stupid, ya tough talk'll get beat stupid
Plus ya 'Tough Guy Front' is "Ghost" cuz I "See Thru It"
7/10...Anotha Good Line, Played On His Name
I'll put the nine to ya melon and lungs, this fella's a thug?
How? When he wouldn't "Lick A Shot" with the "Shell On His Tongue"
7.5/10...Lol Good Humor
So guy stop, this guy's hot? This kid'll get five shots
That'll leave his "casket in the clouds" Thats what I call a "Sky Box"
8/10...Tight Open Line & Closin Line
All your punches are half baked, He says he's real, but this cat's fake
So I'll leave this kid's "Body Sitting In a Bag" Like a "Sack Race"
6.5/10....Basic But Nice
This ho will get killed, how is this kid flowing with skill?
When my mama always told me as a child that a "Ghost isnt real!"
9/10...Nice Close & Play On Dudes Name

You Had 4 Da Most Part....Wordplay, Punches, Metas, A Few Personals Like Da Closin Line

Punches: Tie
Personals: Bars
Creativity: Bars
Wordplay: Bars
Structure: Tie (Both Were Eh)
Multiplez: Ghost (None Really)
Nameplay: Bars (Hit Harder)

OVERALL: Bars Of Steel...Cuz Of Da Harder Punches & Nameplay

RTF...Any Battle Namean
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