DQ-
Good vocab & flow in ur peice, u took dat aspect hands down, wuznt really feelin ur emotion & da creativity iz not da best i seen frum u, it wuz rather basic 2 be honest...nuthin 2 special in da content ov imagination, culd ov used da concept 2 much better effect, scheme ov da peice i wuznt feelin, where as Triple N wuz real creative, but ur structure & complex vocab made diz a real close battle, ur writing seemed more real & not az forced, everythin fitted into place nicely


Triple N-
Much better concept 2 ur peice, had sum iight emotion throughout, imagination wuznt really there, & ur peice seemed 2 make me loose intrest toward da end ov ur peice after deez lines;

Staining the knives with the pain that u deserve to feel
Cuz only seeing your wombs will help me to heal
But these knives can't pierce bitch, they only sever feelings
But ya neurons seised firing in ya brains emotional center
Winter gets a over coat when your outside in december
Cuz your heartlessness plays the biggest part in this
Attributed to your doctorate degree in the art of bitch
But I guess I was your pajamas wit the feet inclosed
Jus something intentionally made for you to outgrow

Seemed 2 lack concsistancy in ur whole peice, started off strongly, wit sum really meaningful & creative lines, then u let ur self go & i lost intrest, if u wuld ov kept da solid content ov ur opening lines, u wuld ov easily took diz because i honestly wuznt feelin da concept ov DQ'z peice

Vote-DQ

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