Liked reading this piece, least I can say is you sure approached it in a creative way
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Vocab was right on point, sometimes big vocab can ruin a piece but yours was suited for it, it only affected the content in a positive way. Emotion was very strong and raw, had some excellent imagery in there and the ending was very nice with a surprise effect.
Keep it up man, I like reading your stuff!