hmm, i have to go with DQ....both of your structures were diff from what you usually do, to start off.

Triple...yeah, you started off with some real, vivid lines....but you really fell off towards the middle and end, i thought, and although i could follow it easily, i didn't like your rhyme scheme, even though that doesn't matter much, i think it still hindered you some in this one. but overall, you had a good idea, but you didn't keep it through till the end.

DQ....i have to say, i really like your old style, i think your sacrificing alot of emotion, and imagery, with trying to rhyme so much....just telling ya, but you still had a solid piece here, came at a different angle, which is good...and your emotion really stood out here....because both had decent imagery...you took emotion though, and thats what pulled through....

v/DQ, good battle to both, keep up.

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