Voted For: E.C
Ghosts Verse
Leave Ya In "Critical-Condition" Like This Battle Was Involved In 'Physical'-Contact
The Only Time Ya Lyriks "Vulgarized" Iz When You Key Them On A 'Explicical'-Contract"
^ Rhyme good flow poor structure stretched perhaps due to font but not good flow
Your Gonna Be 'Another' 'Casualty',So I guess Ima Have To Add Ya Name In Addition
You Could Gain Tonz Of 'Fame',But Your Still Gon Be Lackin Of Grippin My Ambition
^ punch not super strong kinda basic really...stretched again flow weak
Leave Ya Linez "Evaporizin",Like Boilin Water Waiting To Be Replaced My Humid-Steam
Leave Ya Donating Ya Lyriks To "Good-Will",Along With Ya Useless-Team
^ better punch like the bar needs re-wording to flow...it DOES matter in text
Redeem Yaself From This Forum,Cuz your Resposible To Unregisterin N Not Returning
Your Like A "Mentally-Retarded" Child,Goin To "School" But Steady Not-Learning
^ good bar flow weak again...could be better
No Need In Proceeding To Battle,Cuz Its Over, by Just Readin Half My Verse
My Lyriks Similiar To "Sprite-Advertisement", They Make Ya Havin To (Quinch-Ya-Thirst)
^ no diss played punch self-glory direction in this bar was poo
Your A Child Homie,Fifteen?,Your Barely Probably Developin Hormonez And Genez
Your Lyriks Couldnt Be "Tight",If "Aretha-Franklin -Squeezed- Ya Verse n Her Jeanz
^ closer meh...punch aimed...hit but not OHH material...again coulda been better
Overall
Still need improving Ghost reading this was hard structure wsa stretched causing weak flow punches were hmm ok at best but 1 or 2 bars slipped in places personals were basic "look at his profile ish" so average marks there...you need to think about re-writing verses as well...you may feel comfortable writing like this but everyone has a different style and honestly...why type word like "evaporizin" when evaporising is more clear...coz i had to keep goin back to make sure i got the right word...
E.Cs Verse
i hear you got tight wordplay, but that shit never worries me,
cuz whippin down ya pants to flash ya bits is the only time ya sonnin me,
^ Eugh nasty lol...good flow punch there re-wordin perhaps but ok to start off wit
a texas cat, howdy! like toy soldiers i'm telling him a "toy story",
but the only time u seeing "woody" is when u get morning glory,
^ lol good bar personal/punch there nice flow too
your the one and only... what makes u think people wanna be you,
soul rebel said i was battling ghost, i replied......I CAN'T SEE YOU!,
^ nice flip on his name good bar there again flow on point
go and take a "shower", chill out, fuck it man take one wit ya "wife",
u could be "stabbin" like "bates", and still not get a feel for "knives",
^ not really feelin this like previous bars kinda lacked...the ooo factor
every ghost has a story, he "drowned" in his "shit" at his own house,
figures why he "swears",well at least you went out with a "foul" "mouth",
^ lol @ this bar foul as in fawl no doubt lol nice pick up from previous bar
good sportsmanship fam, get eazy to play "ball", and maybe clean up,
coz the only time u playin wit "b's" is when ur fondeling b "cups",
^ again no ooo factor in it but the punch was there though
i'm all for the occation, whip out the "trainers" i'm running this grande,
ill leave "tread" on your face just to say you got stomped by a "brand"
^ ok closer coulda been better though IMO
Overall
E.C walked wit this...verse not great but enough punches were more on point flipped the name, flowed reasonably well...the wording a lot more clearer than Ghosts as well IMO...
V/E.C...this is an RTF no limit on vote is required
