ok i cant go for that regular break down i normally do but. i will explain little parts i liked n disliked. well first of all, the opener had to be very hard hitting. and thats what you did. showed much emotion. had a nice way of putting you words in front of one another. damn this was on point the whole way through. you showed i think a bit to much emotion but it is nothing wrong with that. you have really proven yourself to be a very advanced poet. vey well done. i BOW to you for posting such a great poem.