MURDZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!!!!!!

whats up? man, this was pretty vivid (love that word, lol)....great story actually, awesome flow, had some funny lines in there too

Now she Mad as Shit, picked up a bottle n Threw It At Me
Man I've had some girl problems before, but Few Attacked Me
^nice little suttle humour in there, haha

but anyways, who cares if this was long, it kept me reading the whole time, and thats a great talent right there, keep it flowing and interesting, big props there.....and the story was cool too, ending was kinda vio-lent, lol....but i like the closer, ahha...good stuff man, keep for sure

check-yo-pms beach

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