i was feeling this peice. the flow was there and the vocab was there also.
you showed your emotion through these words nicely and this peice seemed
deep. nice peice fam. def. looking forward to peeping some of your newer peices
keep me updated and drop a link or so to me on aim ill check em out....
Fav Lines- The imagery was strong here
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The man patients broke,He raised his voice he couldn't take a joke.
He's made his choice.Loosend his sleeve and he shanked the boy.
How could you do this to me?with blood drippin from his lip.
Shit,this is provin to be.The truth.Bringing my spirits down.
I fear,but let's go twenty years from Now....
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i would really love to hear this recorded
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