Okay, lemme break this down

I like the concept you went with and how the person took upon this killing spree as a sort of revenge. The imagery was certainly there but the strongest aspect in my opinion was your emotion. You really showed us the ideas running through the person's mind, the motives and reasoning. Went nicely into detail about everything which kept the readers focussed cause they wanna know more. Flow was good, had some similar sound expression in there, good sentence length.

Nice piece gurl! Keep it up

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