ok both did good here but K piece was more like a topical than poetry it rhymed and thats good but try to make it more like poetry next time the basics of ur verse was nice and good vocab and everythin was good i just felt that it sounded more like a topical verse rather than a poetry piece, WA his piece was good it was short and had the basics of a poetry piece it had visual words and kept it simple but still a good and difficult piece to outshine it so both did good and keep on doin it but my
v// goes to White Ave.

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