Pen N' Paper : Well, you had a long piece here. But it was decent, imagery was decent but nothing that really captivated my mind. You're vocabulary was on-point so no flaws there. You just need to concentrate on the topic at hand because I wasn't feeling you're approach on this..
Overall - 60/100..

Drakel : Nice, yours was shorter but packed with emotion. I could visualise & a few of you're lines got me thinking. Your approach I felt was alot better, it made sense & flowed well. So due to a smoother more enjoyable read..
Overall - 75/100..