Voted For: Compose

meh, i was definately feeling compose's more

tony: you had a touching story man...but complexity and enjoyment just weren't there....i feel if you came at this with greater vocab, to create more imagery and enhanced emotion...you could have ended with a real good story, and possibly the win....but i feel you lacked a whole bunch, except for the fact that this was a true story...you managed to express it well....but just because it was true, doesn't mean its an automatic win; theres more to it than that....keep up, elevate

compose: uh, it was different, lol....but you told a vivid story, vocab really brought out the imagery/storyline....decent emotion, i think if you completed thoughts a little more, it woulda been better....sentences seemed a little short.........i think what sealed this for you, were your last 4 lines; serioulsy, they were awesome, nice flow, well thoughtout, solid message: overall, great way to end a nice piece

i think you were the better competitor in this one, props to ya both, keep up

v/compose...rtf.

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